高三英语写作专题复习
同题异作
---学生习作讲评课
Characteristics of this lesson   Mini-writings   Write from sentence to passage
微写作，从句子到段落

“快餐式”写作训练
“迷你文”
Teaching Design
Teaching contents
Comments on students’ mini--writings（Three topics）
Teaching procedures for each topic（Five steps）
1.Presenting the material for mini-writing
2.Preparations for writing （Interaction 互动环节）
Activity1. Discussion about the writing topic
Activity2. Organization of language
3.Presentation of picked versions of the students’ writings. Error-correction. （Interaction 互动环节）
4.Presentation and comment on the given translation.
5.Presentation and comparison of the modified one by the teacher. （Follow me 跟我写）
Teaching aims
1.Try to make the lesson innovative， interesting，lively and impressive by using some symbols of net emotion such as
2.Encourage the students to improve their writing skills step by step.
Topic1 写作素材
1．前几天，我们五位代表参观了由著名建筑师设计的美术馆。
2．美术馆是这座城市的标志性建筑。
3．它坐落在那个巨型雕塑的对过。
4．在那里我们加深了对古老艺术和文明的理解。
Preparations for writing
A visit to the gallery
1. About the topic 微话题
记叙，说明相结合
2. Organization of language
1.建筑师 architect
builder
constructor
designer
building designer
2.加深理解 deepen one’s understanding of…
have a better/further understanding of…
know better/more about…
3. 雕塑 sculpture ,statue
4. 美术馆 gallery, art gallery
museum art museum
5.文明 civilization
Brainstorm of words and expressions
同题异作
微习作，互改错
Five versions
____
was
________
opposite
____
we
∧
more
／
_____
gallery
______
Students’ Version1
________________
A few days ago
________
____
huge
___
on
representatives
____
was
Version2
_______
comprehension
不整洁
——
A few
________
representatives
Don’t follow him!
Version3
Version4
∧
is
___
____
∧
a
Worth following!
______
sculpture
Version5
∧
on
少语病，但句型结构单一，缺乏连贯
晨记有道
考点对接
基础巩固
写作专题
The given translation
参考文，评一评
Comment: 较连贯，翻译痕迹明显，分量不足。(38 words)
Follow me  看师作，学整合
A visit to the gallery
A few days ago five representatives of us paid a visit to the gallery designed by a famous architect. It is a landmark of the
city, which is standing opposite the huge sculpture, looking very beautiful. Not only did we have a pleasant journey but also we learned more about ancient art and civilization. (54 words)
The modified version
跟我写
Topic2 写作素材
1．这些家庭渴望更好的生活。
2．他们应该得到培训和教育。
3．他们应该努力改变他们的生活。
4．随着经济的发展，所有人将过上幸福的生活。
Preparations for writing
About the topic 微话题
小议论
Common people’s dream
2. Organization of language
1. 渴望 look forward to/ expect/ long for
be hungry for
2. 应得培训和教育 should be…/ should get…/ deserve…
3. 努力改变生活 make efforts to change…/work hard to improve…/ to make…better
4. 随着…发展 as… develops/ with the development of…/ with… developing
5. 过幸福生活 live/lead a happy life
live happily
同题异作
微习作，互改错
Six versions
∧
a
____
families
Follow her, please!
Students’ Version1
Version2
a
∧
______
Version3
____
families
____
who
____
for
∧
a
____
With
Do not follow him!
字太大，行间距太宽，感觉只是堆砌单词，无语句感。
Version4
____
life
____
life
____
develops
Don’t follow him/her!
Version5
Worth following!
Version6
Follow her, please!
基础巩固
晨记有道
考点对接
基础巩固
The given translation
参考文，评一评
Comment: 翻译痕迹明显，缺乏连贯，分量不足。(36 words)
看师作，学整合
Common people’s dream
These households are expecting a better life, for which they deserve to be trained and educated. Of course, they should also work hard to make their life better. Hopefully, with the economy developing, all the people have equal opportunities to develop and live a wealthy and happy life. (48 words)
Follow me
The modified version
Topic3 写作素材
1．这个地区发生了一场可怕的地震，造成了很多损失。
2．很多人被埋在建筑物下。
3．有几个人失去了生命。
4．令人欣慰的是，地震一发生，全世界的人们都提供了帮助。
Preparations for writing
About the topic 微话题
记叙，报道相结合
A terrible earthquake
2. Organization of language
1. 发生地震
----地震发生/袭击…
happen/ take place/strike/ hit
2. 造成损失
cause/result in ; loss/damage
3. 被埋…
be buried in/
be laid/covered…
4. 失去生命 lose one’s life/ be killed/die
cause many deaths
同题异作
微习作，互改错
Eight versions
________
suffered
_______
deal/amount
_________
destroyed
_______
made
Students’ Version1
Worth following!
Version2
_______
________
lives
______
were
Version3
______
suffered
______
occurred
Version4
____
were
____
lost
______
occurred
Hard to read! Don’t follow him/her!
Version5
______
suffered
Version6
Version7
不整洁，需改进！
______
struck
_________________
______
______
______
______________
______
______
______
______
______
____
Version8
基础巩固
晨记有道
考点对接
基础巩固
写作专题
The given version
参考文，评一评
Comment: 语句连贯，翻译痕迹明显，分量不足。
(37 words)
看师作，学整合
Follow me
A terrible earthquake
Once a terrifying earthquake hit the area, causing a lot of damage. Apart from those buried in the buildings, some people even lost their lives. Thankfully, people all over the world offered timely assistance soon after the earthquake occurred, which brought much comfort and relief to the victims. (48 words)
The modified version
Thank you for
participation!
课后小结
本堂写作讲评课的特点重在一个“微”字---微写作，一种“快餐式”的写作训练，从句子到段落，扎实练好主谓结构，循序渐进地提高学生连句成文的写作能力。面向全体学生，分级要求，分类推进写作训练，力求让每名学生都能找到适合自己的训练目标，获取训练的成就感。